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Dear Diary,

I couldn't sleep at all yesterday.
It was a long holiday and I got a call from the landowner ? House owner at night, before dinner.
She had talked to me I needed to move out until this year. So, I've prepared to move out. But She told me if I want to stay more, I could but increaing 10,000,000 won for Jeonse.
I thought my Jeonse was already expence but moving cost and real estate brokerage fees will be serious too. If I got more lone from bank It could be figured out but, I am afraid if it's rent fee is too high to get next tenant. This think never went to out whole night and whole day.

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🔧 문장별 교정 + 설명

🔴 landowner ? House owner
→ landlord (or landlady)

• 집주인은 일반적으로 landlord/landlady라고 표현

🔴 She had talked to me I needed to move out until this year.
→ She told me I needed to move out by the end of this year.

• until this year → by the end of this year (더 정확한 표현)

🔴 So, I've prepared to move out.
→ So I started preparing to move out.

• 시제 통일 (과거 상황)

🔴 But She told me if I want to stay more, I could but increaing 10,000,000 won for Jeonse.
→ But then she said I could stay longer if I added 10,000,000 won to the Jeonse deposit.

• want to stay more → stay longer
• increaing → added (더 자연스럽게)

🔴 I thought my Jeonse was already expence
→ I thought my Jeonse was already expensive

• expence → expensive

🔴 but moving cost and real estate brokerage fees will be serious too.
→ but the moving costs and real estate brokerage fees would be heavy too.

• serious보다는 heavy가 금전적 부담에 더 적절

🔴 If I got more lone from bank It could be figured out
→ If I got another loan from the bank, I could manage it

• lone → loan
• figured out보다는 manage it이 더 자연스러움

🔴 but, I am afraid if it's rent fee is too high to get next tenant.
→ but I’m afraid the rent might be too high to find the next tenant.

• rent fee보다는 단순히 rent

🔴 This think never went to out whole night and whole day.
→ This thought never left my mind all night and all day.

• think → thought, went to out → left my mind

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🌿 자연스러운 전체 버전

**Dear Diary,
I couldn’t sleep at all yesterday.
It was a long holiday, and I got a call from my landlady last night before dinner.
She told me I needed to move out by the end of this year.
So I started preparing to move, but then she said I could stay longer if I added 10,000,000 won to the Jeonse deposit.

I already thought my Jeonse was expensive, and moving costs plus real estate brokerage fees would be heavy too.
If I got another loan from the bank, maybe I could manage it, but I’m afraid the rent might be too high to find the next tenant later.

This thought stayed with me all night and all day, and I just couldn’t rest.**